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(Kumbhakarna from Smite Game Official Wiki ) As he slumbered the pounding of drums and the ringing of trumpets rolled through his unconscious mind. Though he was cursed to slumber for half of the year, Kumby still absorbed the happenings around him. Kumby slumbered on but the pounding of drums grew steadily louder. He rolled over, covering his ears with his massive arms. However, his giant arms were not enough to drown out the sounds. "Kumby! Wake up brother, I need you now!" a distant voice called, cutting through the fog in his mind. "Rav?" he muttered groggily. The voice called again. Kumby's eyes opened slowly blinking away the sleep. He rubbed at them with the backs of his meaty hands. "Kumby, brother, the kingdom is under attack. We are at war. I need you fighting beside me," Rav said, clapping his brother on his enormous shoulder. Kumby, the giant, blinked again willing all of the grogginess out of his mind. "What wa...
Erika! Wow! Your Wix site is amazing! When I first looked at your site I thought it was cool because the background image was actually a video but then I scrolled down and saw that you included sound too so I turned on my sound and I literally got chills when I heard the lion roar. You have created a true atmosphere for your project and I think that is awesome! After I read your introduction I was excited to find out more. I think the topic that you chose is really interesting. Mainly because of the look of your Wix site I just want to come back and see what other creative elements you bring into it. I really look forward to seeing what other stories you publish and what else you decide to add to your project. Good luck with the rest of the semester and I look forward to see what you public next! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Erika! I loved your website's setup! Even though there isn't much to read yet, presentation is everything, and your website's design caught my attention immediately (even though the swaying jungle background made me a bit motion sick). I loved the growling sound effect you added, as well as that fierce image at the top of the introduction you wrote. The intro makes Narasimha seem a character to contend with, and I look forward to learning more about them in the stories you will write for this project. I was itching for an author's note to explain who this great beast was! I'd love to get to know them more throughout the stories.
ReplyDeleteHey Erika! I really like the vibrance of your site design! It makes it really stand out. The lion growl was a nice touch to the home page and it caught me off guard the first time I heard it, haha. I like how you made Narasimha sound so commanding and powerful. The image you chose was a great choice, as it fits with his character and makes him seem to emanate some divine authority. If there was anything that I wish were included in the introduction, it would just be a bit more detail put in for what the stories that we're about to be told consist of. Also, some more background on Narasimha would be nice to know, perhaps where he lived at the time and how long ago the war was. Anyways, I'm really looking forward to reading through the stories you add from here on out!
ReplyDeleteHey Erika! I love your site! The graphics along with the music establish such a specific tone for the reader and really immerse the reader in the ambiance of your story. Also the image itself that you used for the introduction page is so cool! I immediately knew what to picture as I read about the King of Beasts. One problem I see is that going forward, I really don't know what to expect from the stories. The introduction should give the reader a good feel of what to expect. Will this be a saga or collection of stories? Do I need to look out for characters featured? I would also be mindful of the order of your tabs and their coloring. I'm not sure purple is the best color as it doesn't stand out too much and those tabs are the main way of navigating your site. Also I wonder if Comment Wall should be last and About should be first?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to reading the first story post!
ReplyDeleteErika, I just randomly clicked on your Indian Epics project and was not disappointed. I was defiantly brought in by the amazing graphics and setup you created in your website. I like how you have the sound of the lion going on in the background of your first story. I hope you can incorporate other animal sounds into your future stories based on the animals that might come into the storyline later. I know from creating my own storybook the Introduction page does not give an explanation about the characters that you have created and much of a storyline. I would suggest in your first story in the author's notes to include a link to information about Narasimha. Unless we have reading about him later on, I personally had to google the name to see if it was a character you had created on your own or from Indian culture. Great project. I cannot wait to come back later and read more stories.
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ReplyDeleteI was just randomly clicking on the projects and the first project I picked was yours and it was not bad at all. I really like the way you present the story and the avatar of Vishnu is King of Beast. Your website was interest; on the home page it has the interesting picture of Narasimha and also video that shows the lion. The color that you put for the website name and tabs is purple but it does not suit with your amazing background. If you can change it than change it to something that makes if more appealing to readers. Everything else is on your website is really nice, but the most thing that I like is the picture on your home page. There was not much information in the introduction but it gives the specific detail. I look forward to reading your stories in future on Narasimha.
Hey there, Erika! I really like your Introduction about Narasimha. Especially the lion sound in the background it gave me the chill in my spine I am not kidding it was just so epic. I like how you stared out your introduction by telling people who he is and what kind of misconception people have about Narasimha but he proves them wrong and proclaims that he is the King of all Beasts. I also like his righteousness not only to protect the beasts but also the humans with it because you know beast are beast cruel and merciless but Narasimha character is different he protect both of them the beast and human from evil. The plot was also really interesting that they are protecting wealth of Knowledge and arts house. I really want to know what kind of arts and knowledge they are protecting from evil so the world get their hands on it.
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ReplyDeleteFirst, the opening page of your site is so cool! The sound effects and the moving background is really cool. It really grabbed my attention. Next, I like the overall them of the project. 'The King of Beasts" is really catchy and really gets the reader intrigued about what the project is actually about.
Your Introduction is also very good. I really like the picture that you have at the top. I feel like it gives the reader an idea of what Narasimha looks like and maybe gives the reader a sense of how Narasimha would behave. This is the first project that I have seen that I didn't see anything that could be fixed with in the writing. I did notice a few cosmetic errors with in your project. It may be helpful to change font colors so that the reader can easily see the text and different tabs that are with in the site. Just a suggestion though. I'm sure you have a plan on how you want the project to look and feel. Great Job and I am looking forward to seeing your project progress.
Hello Erika. I was really impressed wit your site. It was by far the most detailed and styled one I have seen so far. I really liked the moving background and did not even know that was something that could be done. I was also not expecting a sound effect and was surprised by the lion roar. Your images were also great and really conveyed you "King of the Beasts" theme. I especially like the home page image, which is terrifying and powerful. Unfortunately you did not yet have any stories for me to read. I am looking forward to seeing what your stories are like and hope you put the same care and details into them. I thought your introduction was good and I liked your writing style. I am looking forward to reading stories from this perspective. I think you did a good job of personifying Narasimha. Keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteHey Erika. That sound effect of a roaring lion as soon as you open up your story is pretty neat. It goes really well with that picture you have chosen. I also really like how you have an animated background for the story book. I am assuming that is one of the reasons you chose Wix for making your storybook? It seems to have a lot more features than Google sites. Your introduction is really great. The way you have it set up builds a suspenseful and curious air for the reader and draws us in. One thing that kind of threw me off reading through the intro was when you said “beast creatures.” It seems a little redundant and picking one or the other for this sentence could probably add a little bit of clarity. Also, your final sentence is somewhat of a run on. You might be able to chop it into two pieces to make things easier on the reader.
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ReplyDeleteYour storybook is so well put together. Everything about the website draws you in and keeps you engaged. I felt transported as soon as I opened your webpage. I liked that you changed the main character to his own entity, instead of an avatar of Vishnu. You have set up a really cool concept with the beasts serving as protectors. One comment I have that may make your story flow better is in the first sentence. I would put a period after "of Lion and Man," and making "some say I am" the start of a new sentence. Breaking that into two sentences, in my opinion, would add suspense and drama. I love how much thought went into your page, even down to the font color. Your final sentence made me so excited to read your first story, so I was very disappointed that it hasn't been published yet. I will be on the look out for your next story. I can't wait to keep reading your work.
Hello Erika!
ReplyDeleteFirst thing, I absolutely love your layout. It's very eye catching and original! It makes use of a lot of the senses which really helps draw in your readers and makes them curious. After reading your author's note, I also really like that you chose purple for the text. It's very symbolic and I like that! The pictures fit great with your spiritual lion feel and really helps set the mood. Your introduction has a great mix between mystery and wisdom, which is what I really take away from Narasimha. I don't know much about him, but I am really interested in his background. I think it's great to have him by himself instead of grouping him with Vishnu. It'll help you focus on sharing just his story! Reading about all the animals in the Indian Epics is going to be very interesting. I look forward to reading more about them!
Hi Erika!
ReplyDeleteThis site is so much fun! I never thought about having sound effects, and it really makes a difference (especially with the slow pan of the jungle in the background). Way to go on bringing site visitors right into the setting!
Your description within the story is a great complement to the vivid, dynamic theme of your site. You have a great balance of action and dialogue with very few grammatical errors, and the plot extension across two (or more?) stories lets you dedicate sufficient words to introducing the characters. I also liked the concept stated in the introduction that the animals actually guard the knowledge of the world. I would like to know a little more about Shakuni and how the battle first began. Perhaps just a quick sentence or two describing how and why he began to attack the animals would help.
Great work, and thanks for making such a fun site!
Hi Erika!
ReplyDeleteYour site is so creative, I love the video and sound effects! This creates such an immersive environment to immediately pull the reader in and get ready for what they're going to read from you. Awesome job!
Your introduction got me ready to hear more about Narasimha. I really like how he presents himself and gives the facts and then gives background on what he's going to be telling you about.
Your first story was well balanced between action and dialogue with the characters so that I never grew tired of either one. I'm so interested to continue to learn more about Narasimha and his adventures! I think it's wise to have him stand alone so we can focus on his character on earth rather than constantly trying to tie him back to Vishnu.
While I really enjoyed the video and sound on your home page, I would recommend maybe having just a still photo on your story pages, as I had a hard time reading with the moving picture in the background. Maybe that's just me, though, and it's nothing big at all! Great work!
Hey Erika!
ReplyDeleteI really like how creative you have been with your websites layout. The inclusion of the sound effects on the homepage and the first story are immersive. While the moving background is cool, and I want it to stay, it made it hard from me to read the text on the page. Maybe you could try decreasing the translucency on the page a bit more. Up to you though.
In regards to the stories I really liked that you chose to write about Narashimha as he has not been covered in the class so far. Your introduction provides a good background for diving into the rest of the stories. You write with so much detail in you writing, it is very impressive! This writing style mixed with the immersion of the site makes it feel like you are there with Narashimha. It was a very good start to the storybook and I want to read more of it!
Hi Erika! I like the animated background you've used for your site, and the text of your stories is easy to read because fo the black semitransparent background. However, I am having some trouble reading the links along the top header. I bet you can find a way to make that text bigger, or if you found a way to add a bar of the same type of semitransparent background behind those links. Either option would make it a lot easier to read.
ReplyDeleteIn your story "Vritra and the Great River" you do such a good job of describing the jungle in a very vivid way. Especially since it plays a vital role in the story as the sacred home of Narasimha and a safe place for the refugees fleeing the war, the way you describe the forest helps put the reader in the setting you want.
I hope you get to continue this story because I want to read how it turns out.
Hi Erika! First thing, I really appreciate the moving background that you have! I have never seen that before I think that is super awesome! Also the sound effects in the background is insane and scared me when I first opened it. Your stories seem pretty awesome and I really appreciate how it all follows the same theme of your portfolio. One thing That I really appreciate is your author's notes and how you explain why you chose the stories and your train of thought!
ReplyDeleteHi, Erika! First of all, I have to commend your website. I am thoroughly impressed with the way the background moves, and your embedding the lion’s roar into the site as well. Well done. On your introduction, I like the wording you used throughout. It felt very expositional and engaging, It was like reading a real book! I also like the suspense of “but then, a hero arose.” I think an ellipses here might be fitting! (…) On your first story, using dialogue to open a story is an easy and effective way to get the readers engaged immediately. Another thing that I love to see in a story is imagery. You have used a vast amount of descriptors that allow us to visualize and become a part of the story. Also, I can actually hear the “hissing” dialogue from Vritra. Nice! I will be checking back to read more of your works. You are doing a really great job.
ReplyDeleteHello, nice to meet you Erika!
ReplyDeleteI just got done looking through your storybook page! The idea you decided to base your storybook off of is super cool Erika. First off, the way you decided to layout your storybook is super cool! I like the movement your were able to put into the background of your stories, althoguh at times it could be a little bit distracting from the reading, but that could just be my hyper active mind. Basing your stories off of the tales of Narasimha is also super cool, because lions are super cool. Your introduction definetely sets up the rest of your stories you have put into your story book. It is incredibly fetailed and thoroughly introduces how you will be writing and creating your stories. I only have one suggestion as to how you could make your story book better, which would be to change the font.
Hello, it is nice to (virtually) meet you, Erika! First of all, I love the animation and detailed graphic on the Home page of your website. Your layout gives readers a clear and vivid idea of what the title "The King of Beasts" means. The Introduction was well-written and the last sentence creates a suspense for the readers making them want to read more. In your next two stories, you may consider writing the title of the story on the actual page and not just in the navigation bar. In addition, you can consider describing more of who and what Shakuni is and what he looks like. Your story is extremely descriptive and lively which is wonderful and which allows readers to paint a picture in their minds as they read. I especially enjoyed the beginning paragraph of part two of the story were you repeated the phrase "he had no doubt..." I believe this gives emphasis and a glimpse at the mind of Skakuni. Overall great Storybook, keep up the good work! :)
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ReplyDeleteYour website is so great! I love the audio detail on it. When I first clicked on your site I was so confused because I could hear the lion roaring, but I had no clue where it was coming from. It was cool that you added a sound affect to every story. Your attention to detail is so great and the stories are very interesting as well. My favorite was Vritra and the Great River. My favorite thing about this class has been learning about different Hindu gods and goddesses so getting to learn about Narasihma. It is super impressive that you made your own sort of epic around him and attributed him with his own story and traits. From the font color to the sound to the title, you have thought this out so much and I am so glad I got the chance to see your website and read your stories.
Hello Erika! Your website is amazing! The home page kind of blew me away. I haven't seen anyone put that kind visual of effort into their home page of their website. The background gif and roar sound that plays when you open the page really sets the tone and scene for your stories well and grabbed my attention immediately. The picture is really cool as well and gives me a great image of the fierce and imposing protagonist of your story. The only suggestion I have for your website layout is that maybe you choose a different font in your navigation bar because the one now makes it hard to read. The audio you use on all of your stories does an amazing job of setting the tone and helping the reader imagine themselves right in the action. Your Vritra and the Great River story starts out amazingly with the audio combined with the dialogue of the King. Your storytelling style works so well I'm not sure there are any suggestions I can make. Good job and I'm happy to have stumbled onto your project.
ReplyDeleteHello Erika, really great storybook! Firstly, I think you did a wonderful job using imagery throughout your stories. The graphic picture in your title page is very jarring and immediately sets the tone for the rest of the series. Also, great job connecting sound effects to the stories. I think this adds an immersive effect for the readers. Also, I really loved the way you built your characters. Narasimha was obviously very powerful from your first story. They way he shakes the ground when he lands and has such a calm composure when talking to other powerful beasts is very telling of his strength. You did a good job of leaving the storybook open to future options. I think the idea of creating character pages would really help with this idea and make it really easy to focus on the stories while having a clear direction of how you want your characters to develop. Great job and good luck finishing up the semester!
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